Whst the judges thought.

''Trigger Finger Itch'' by Jo Anna Van Thuyne - WHAT THE JUDGE(S) LIKED ABOUT YOUR STORY - ...The first scene at the locker is perfect. The author stretches the moment out just right, getting us in the killer's head..........The first-person narration of this story is consistently believable as that of a teenaged killer. The story is sparse and unnerving.....................

.....................Some really interesting perspectives, ie. the notion Charlie is sharing a very romantic and important moment with the woman he loves as he kills her boyfriend, as well as, Charlie finally finding happiness in school...................... WHAT THE JUDGES FEEL NEEDS WORK - ...Reminds me of a movie I watched but I can't recall the name. Basically about the Columbine shootings. So it has been done. However, this guy does it well..........This story is a vignette, rather than a full narrative. It is a surface account of a brutal act, without exploring the deeper motivations of circumstances surrounding its climax. There is little suspense, as the story is so straightfoward and generic in its characterization. .................................…......Maybe a bit too predictable. Perhaps the reasoning behind Charlie’s actions could be flushed out a bit more – not much is known except he was teased about something or other. The descriptions are repetitive and not very creative......

Meh... I wasn't very happy with the final product, but I think the positive has outweighed the negative.